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You're my favourite shade of summer,
The strongest hand I've held.
If your eyes were stars on high,
They'd be the brightest in the sky.
With a voice like warm wind calls,
My name sweetly upon your lip falls.
The purest song I've heard
From the handsomest bird,
Will never give me such joy
As my emerald-eyed boy.
You're my lonesome sigh,
The best kind of apple pie,
The fresh spring rain
Hitting my windowpane.
"Stay with me" my heart pleads,
It breaks, heals and bleeds.
When you're gone my kite,
Has flown from sight.
In the darkest nights,
Your memory whispers light.
You're the colour of snow,
The green that grass grows.
Despite the miles,
I'm wrapped in smiles.
In your arms I'm grasped,
And firmly clasped.
The strongest hand I've held.
If your eyes were stars on high,
They'd be the brightest in the sky.
With a voice like warm wind calls,
My name sweetly upon your lip falls.
The purest song I've heard
From the handsomest bird,
Will never give me such joy
As my emerald-eyed boy.
You're my lonesome sigh,
The best kind of apple pie,
The fresh spring rain
Hitting my windowpane.
"Stay with me" my heart pleads,
It breaks, heals and bleeds.
When you're gone my kite,
Has flown from sight.
In the darkest nights,
Your memory whispers light.
You're the colour of snow,
The green that grass grows.
Despite the miles,
I'm wrapped in smiles.
In your arms I'm grasped,
And firmly clasped.
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I was sitting out on the back church steps and I looked up and saw the light in the trees and looked down and grasped my pen in hand and smiled at all our memories. There are some things I can't help writing.
"You have a smile that can light up a room, like sunshine in June." - [link]
"You have a smile that can light up a room, like sunshine in June." - [link]
© 2010 - 2024 Alnia
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Alnia....you never cease to amaze me....man, that's so good! What kind of trees were you looking at? I suspect you entered Narnia. Didn't you? *asked accusingly*
Hmm....do I have any constructive criticism? Perhaps only in two places.
Uno: My name sweetly upon your lip falls.
Well, perhaps lips would be better. It could have been a typo but yeah.
Dos: When you're gone my kite, (...) I think there should be a comma before my kite...just because it makes it a bit clearer and helps the rhythm.
Besides these two minor things, it's pretty good....the rhythm is sometimes unsteady (number of syllables per line) but besides that, very good.
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Hmm....do I have any constructive criticism? Perhaps only in two places.
Uno: My name sweetly upon your lip falls.
Well, perhaps lips would be better. It could have been a typo but yeah.
Dos: When you're gone my kite, (...) I think there should be a comma before my kite...just because it makes it a bit clearer and helps the rhythm.
Besides these two minor things, it's pretty good....the rhythm is sometimes unsteady (number of syllables per line) but besides that, very good.
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